My Father

     My father always stands in the center of my life, from past till now and possibly in the future.
     My family was rather poor when I was in my childhood. We didn't have our own house and had to live in a shabby, small room rented from my father's factory. The room was so small that there was little space for people to walk. I didn't have my own bed and had to sleep with my parents. This is terrible both for my parents and me.
     But father made this all different! Since the room was on the third floor, namely, the top floor in that old style building, the roof was quite high above the floor. So father got an idea.  He bought two thick ropes and a flat wood that later was planed smooth, painted and drilled two holes on both ends.
     Then he hung the ends of ropes up to the roof. During the daytime, these two ropes would be tied up so that people down could walk freely! When night came, father would loose the ropes and tied them to the two holes of that flat wood.  The length of these ropes was just long enough for me to sit or sleep on the board without other's help.
      So in this way my lovely, removable bed was born.
      When winter came, this special bed obviously wouldn't be able to make me feel warm enough. But father always had his so lution! He built a garret using some flat wood and iron sticks right above the bed. With some used iron tubes, he made an iron ladder for us to climb up to the garret. Besides, he made a wood en desk for me to do my homework, and some simple furniture for my clothes, books and something else  he had in fact made a small bedroom for me.
      At first, my mother and I dared not climb for fear that it might collapse. But father climbed it everyday to prove its safety. The garret looked simple even shabby and the ladder seemed to decline soon. But later when I got used to it, I found it as solid as those made by professional carpenters. （科教作文网http://zw.ΝsΕAc.com发布）
     I carried all my personal things onto that garret. My father and I pasted red papers on the wall and painted the ugly furniture red. So the garret became the first "room" that belonged to me.When I was about to move to my new house, I just didn't want to leave.  That garret was created with my father's love and sweat and intelligence, beautified with my hand and filled with so many sweet memories of my family! That hard but sweet life time would live in my memory forever with father stands in the center of it.

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    一个贫寒的家庭。一个充满爱心又能干的父亲。一张父亲制作的简易木床。一个记忆中永远温馨的卧房。描写父爱可以从很多方面入手，可以写很多很多。应该说，这篇文章的语言并没有多少特殊之处。之所以感人至深，是因为这篇文章的选材：集中笔墨写父亲制作的简易木床。这就是突出中心的好处。一滴水可以折射出太阳的光辉；一张木床也可以反映伟大的父爱。父母之爱如三春朝晖无处不在，生活中的任何一点小事都足以将他们对儿女的爱表达得淋漓尽致。其实，想多写，又怎么写得尽?
    (点评教师：汪中平)