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Law Adjustment for Childrens Maturity A Necessity or Redunda

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Law Adjustment for Children's Maturity A Necessity or Redundancy?
As is pointed out by some socialists, children nowadays show a growing tendency to become mature at an earlier age compared with children who were born twenty years ago. The younger generation has a strong self-conscious. And they are eager to make their own decisions. Hence, an adjustment of current laws is suggested by some experts to fit in the newly developed situation.
That sounds like a good idea. But does it reveal the truth?Frankly speaking, the side effects of adjustments in laws, as far as I am concerned, are much greater than their possible merits.First of all, the assumption that "children are more mature than before" is yet to ascertain. Up to now, none of the revolution proponents can give a satisfying definition to tell what maturity exactly means, let alone measuring maturity quantitatively.Thus it is less likely for them to deduce their conclusion. At the same time, with the spreading of so-called maturity, more children are involved in crimes, including some violent ones like murders and hijacks. The conspicuous increase in adolescent crimes calls for an enforcement of law, not irresponsible liberation. Second, suppose the hypothesis held by the revolution proponents is not only objective but also convincing, ignoring the paradox mentioned above, it is still inadequate to conduct a law amendment since "most children are mature" implies the fact that there are still a portion of children, who no matter older or younger are mature. As is known to all, laws are concerned with all the objects of the society. The pre mature ones' rights should also be protected equally. Hence, a common demand for custodians of children aged under eighteen is necessary, if not imperative. Last but not least, a "mature" child who intends on independence lacks a necessary income as the financial support.Due to this situation, if an adjustment of law were carried out,there would be a peculiar phenomenon that children are decision independent while financially reliant. （科教作文网 zw.nseac.com整理）
Due to the three reasons listed above, it is unwise to conduct a complete law adjustment at the moment. Children of the twenty first century are still in need of love and care, as children were twenty years ago.

简 评
李莹同学的这篇作文分为三段，第一段作为introduction，在第二段分三个方面进行论述，最后一段进行总结。结构清晰，观点鲜明，是这篇作文的一大优势。
作者的语言功底扎实，尤其善于使用词组和习语，如last but not least，if not等的使用准确而恰当。作者还善于使用各种语篇的衔接手段，衔接词的使用使逻辑清晰，显得思维缜密，这是本文的又一大优势。
作者的不足之处在于开头和结尾略嫌平淡，如果作者能够进一步精心雕琢自己的语言，充分发挥自己的创造力，文章就更上一层楼了。
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