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Leaving——A Moment of Sudden Growth

2013-10-28 01:25      I am the only child in my family. Like many other children,I follow a routine way to a so called success: primary school,junior school, a key high school and finally, a prestigious university. Lacking in experiences, I keep on feeling that I am only growing big, but no mature. But two leavings left deep impressions on me, giving me a strong sense of growth.
     The first leaving occurred about 4 years ago, the days after I received my junior school diploma. It was a summer afternoon.My father rushed home, singing with a red envelope in his hand.Suddenly, a sense of nervousness and excitement came over me.As I expected, this was the admission letter to a famous key high school. My parents began to laugh happily and proudly. But I could easily perceive a sense of grievance and anxiety.  That＇s true. My new school life would be rooted in school alone. I have never thought it a challenge for me but they did.
     On the registration day,my parents were rushing here and there,as busy bees. But I was idled, with nothing to help. I am a doted child, though I was never willing to confess. My mother was cleaning the room while my father was making bed for me.You can hardly imagine a middle-aged man of 1.80 meters tall huddling in a corner of the bed, doing the job like an acrobat.Suddenly, tears slipped down my cheeks.  I turned around.  I couldn＇t tell whether it was a sense of guilt or the power of love.I could not.  I couldn＇t help glimpsing at my father now and then. A few white hairs were conspicuous, shining in the sun.When the moment to say good bye came at last, I dared not look at my parents＇ eyes.  I murmured goodbye and they staggered out, looking back from time to time. At that moment, I realized what were Growing Pains. I decided to do my best, not only for myself.
      Three years passed quickly. Luckily, I received the admission letter from Fudan University. That was a peaceful and quiet day. We celebrated the success, the success of my family.
      On the first day of my campus life, I intended to go to the university alone, but my parents insisted on accompanying me. It was still my mother who did the cleaning. But I found myself a capable helper. With most of the job done by me, they decided to leave early.  Another moment of leaving!  There were no touching words, nor tears or laughter, sadness or happiness,just saying goodbye to each other. But I found confidence in my parents＇tones. That was an appeased leave, too pacified to believe. It was a common way of farewell between adults.  And now I did belong to one of them. Yes, I should be independent just as little birds must leave nests when growing up. My parents got it. They trust me, and I am worthy of the trust. I could feel the power of growth.
     Farewell,dear mom and dad. Transient parting is the prelude to a newt fascinating get together.

简  评
    李莹同学的这篇作文通过细腻而独到的视角，描述了两次与父母的道别，并点出了别离是成长道路上的重要一课。从娓娓的叙事中，我们可以看到一个同学成长的心路历程。
    作者的观察非常细致，用词准确。对于两次不同的别离，父母的反应是不同的。作者通过细腻的笔触描写了这些不同之处，比如第一次父母离去时是staggered out，一步一回头，而第二次孩子长大了，父母的道别少了几分牵挂，多了几分信心。作者对环境的描写以及自己的行为、表现在两次分离中也是各不相同的，值得读者细细体味。
    作者的语言也很出色，使用了对比、排比、比喻等修辞手段，起到了很好的效果。最后一段的语言尤其出色，显示了作者对语言的熟练掌握。