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My Impression of University Life

2013-10-24 01:08     How time flies! One month has passed before I could take any notice of it. This is the start of my freshman year in Fudan University. At the very beginning, everything and everyone is strange to me. But now, everyday and in everyway, I am getting better;I am getting used to it.
     I would like to tell you two things in my university life that are of great importance and interest.
     Freedom is what I am looking forward to since the very first day of my primary school. A lot of people said to me, "Study hard, and you will get freedom when in university." But when I really entered university, I find the real situation is different.Freedom costs me a lot. If I refuse to wash my clothes, for example, they will just lay there, unclean. In a word, I have to do everything and take care of myself. Well, it doesn＇t mean that I don＇t like the life style.  On the contrary, I like it very much though it is hard at the beginning. It is really a challenge for me.
     I appreciate a famous saying from Albert Camus, "Freedom is nothing but a chance to be better." That＇s right. Real freedom comes with responsibility. Some teenagers believe that freedom means doing whatever you like. But I think that is not real freedom at all. One can have his or her own freedom, while at the same time respect others＇. It is not easy to think on behalf of others. University life provides me with this precious chance to practice it.
                                     Love
     Another thing I want to mention is love. Love in the university is different from other places. In my secondary school, love among students are strictly forbidden. But since it is human nature to desire for something that is not allowed, there are still some some lovebirds flying around us. Parents and teachers are unwilling to see it happen.  They make great efforts to stop these birds flying. I still remember two of my friends who were threatened to leave school by my teachers finally had to end their puppy love, though unwillingly. 本文来自中国科教评价网
      But now, something interesting in Fudan is that love exists everywhere. For instance, the first lesson of my English class is about love.  A small play in the Yingxin (Freshmen Welcome Party) called "Turn Left and Turn Right" is about students love in Fudan. Some of my roommates have boyfriends.  At night,while lying in bed, we always share their love stories. What＇s more, even our instructor once said, "In our department, girls are more than boys. So we will have a party with the Chemistry Department, the situation in which is just the opposite. I was surprised about the attitude towards love here. Is our instructor encouraging us to find someone to fall in love with? I cannot understand it quite well.
     What I mentioned above are the two things impressed me most at the very beginning of my freshmen year. They are surely my first impression, and I am sure with the process of my university life I will get more out of it.
简  评
    该文章语言比较流畅自然，能够很恰当地结合引语，Albert Camus的引言有点睛之感。作者也有较好的使用英语修辞能力，如将学生之间的恋情比为"lovebirds flying around us"，语言绘声绘色，有很强的表现力。文章的谋篇布局也是不错的，开首点明了大学生活的总体感受之后，没有老生常谈般的报学校生活的流水账，而是将着眼点放在了两个很具有大学生活特色的具体内容上——自由和爱情，这样就很能引起读者阅读的兴趣。在具体描述大学生的自由和爱情给作者的感受时，她以一个大学新生的眼光——严格地说应该是一个高中生的眼光——写出了新生活新观点给自己带来的冲击。这充分反映出了作者对生活变化的敏锐感知力。尤其值得一提的是“自由”部分的描述，作者不仅仅局限于客观描写，还加入了自己的思考，写出了“Real freedom comes with responsibility．”这样闪耀着年轻人智慧火花和责任感的好句子。但需要指出的是，文章美中不足的是结尾，显得比较仓促，仅仅是对开头的简单重申，让人读后有虎头蛇尾之感。如果能将结尾处理得更精致些，再稍有升华，整篇文章就很完美了。 （转载自中国科教评价网www.nseac.com ）